There was someone there, someone or something other, he thought. Keeping him company. Impossible to confirm a presence. Just a hint of companionship, like mist rising off a lake. Of the lake, but not a part of it. He drifted in and out. Warm, cold. It no longer mattered.
Darkness flowed into light. Was he? Wasn’t he? And wherever he was now, there was no turning back.
His breath hovered in his mouth, neither in nor out. The mere whisper of it was all it took to go from one place to the next. Life, death or something other?
February 17, 2016 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story of a character who is diverse. Who is this person? Does this character know, accept or reject being perceived as different? As writers, consider how we break stereotypes. Tell you own story of “otherness” if you feel compelled. Or, select a story of diversity, such as rainbows revealing gold. How is diversity needed? How is your character needed?
I’ve probably not quite met the brief at the Carrot Ranch this week which was calling for more character than situation but Charli also gives permission in her post to go with where the prompt takes you. Time was short and I couldn’t get this out of my head almost definitely because the next book on my reading list is “When Breath Becomes Air” by Paul Kalanithi – neurosurgeon and writer who died of cancer aged 37.
The title of his book comes from a paraphrased line in the following sonnet by Baron Brooke Fulke Greville
You that seek what life is in death
February 25, 2016 at 8:47 pm
Wow. Stunned. And your header photos, I have been meaning to say…so beautiful…. I’m blown away, that’s all I can say… ❤
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February 29, 2016 at 6:50 pm
Aw thanks Sherri and I’m grateful for the positive feedback on the photo selection. The vast majority are not of my doing. One attempt at blogging a bit lighter – I’m making good use of several free stock sites – some of which I change colours or add text. 😘
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March 2, 2016 at 2:04 pm
It works well Lisa, very well and a great idea to help with blogging light… 🙂
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February 25, 2016 at 12:55 pm
The imagery of this piece is amazing, almost tangible. You have captured the essence of life and the movement from life into death so well. One moment breath, the next moment air. It happens that quickly, without even a whisper.
You have mentioned the book “When Breath Becomes Air” before and I am grateful for the reminder. Although it is not available as an audiobook, a summary is, which I have already downloaded. Greville’s poem is captivating also, but I think you have nailed it with your flash. Well done.
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February 29, 2016 at 6:48 pm
Thank you Nor 😀 So sorry I’m late responding on this post – I just about forgot I hadn’t replied although I’ve loved the response on this one. I really enjoyed what I ended up with and that so rarely happens to me! Lol xx
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March 1, 2016 at 1:04 pm
It is a wonderful piece. 🙂
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February 25, 2016 at 2:50 am
Your flash is lovely! My girlfriend just bought the book “When Breath Becomes Air” by Paul Kalanithi. Your flash and that title of the book are both beautiful and ethereal. My girlfriend and I agreed we’ll wait reading the book until we’re in the right mind set for it.
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February 29, 2016 at 6:46 pm
Thank you Kate. I have now finished said book. Don’t know whether to review it or not on here – from the angle of someone who has had cancer. I had hoped it might be a good one to read if you were facing death – it is well written but.. Left me having a few nightmares. Would you like my take on it as a post?
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February 29, 2016 at 11:41 pm
Kudos for you for reading it. I believe it was a courageous thing to do. I read other reviews of the book and concluded it would not be something I would be comfortable reading – for a long time. Some things are best left unknown. I’ll let you decide if you want to wade into heavy waters by posting your take on the book. Thanks for the informative insight.
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February 29, 2016 at 11:51 pm
Courageous or idiotic! I’m not sure which in hindsight. I realised only after I started examining its impact on me that it’s actually the first of its genre I’ve read in 15 years – where the author dies.. It’s still too soon.
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April 8, 2016 at 7:34 pm
So it kept haunting me Kate and I did the review – When Breath Becomes Air..
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February 24, 2016 at 5:36 am
This is why I love it when writers go where the prompt leads because it sparks something so unexpected! This left me breathless (almost, still breathing). I like Anne’s idea that death might be the ultimate other. What a thought! Great comparison of breath to mist from the lake. I will not look at the pond the same way in the mornings.
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February 29, 2016 at 6:44 pm
Oh Charli! I hope I haven’t ruined your lake and made it somehow sinister?! Like something inanimate that has some sort of life.. Thinking of Stephen King’s “From a Buick 8” here!
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February 23, 2016 at 7:48 pm
Oh, I love this. The idea, the beauty of the words in contrast to the topic, all of it. 💖
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February 29, 2016 at 6:42 pm
Thank you Sarah. It is my favourite creation yet – one of those little bits I’d love to expand into more – you know what I mean 😀
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February 23, 2016 at 4:11 pm
Clever flash, later, maybe death is the ultimate Other!
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February 29, 2016 at 6:41 pm
Thank you Anne xx (Can’t believe I’m so slow/rude getting back to you!)
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February 23, 2016 at 10:42 am
Brilliant
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February 23, 2016 at 2:05 pm
Thank you! And thanks for stopping by 😊
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